25 Jun 2008 3:15 pm
It was good to see you here with a new story. I loved this one. It was very emotional. Also a different twist with Mary having lost a child. For me at least I beleive that as soon as the child is conceived its a child to me and its lost even before being born would be heart breaking. So I thought you did a wonderful job in describing their emotions here from both of their point of views. I would even like to see a sequel to this story. It has potential for one.
Author's Response: Thank you for the comment! To be perfectly frank with you, I'm not all that crazy about the ending. How Chris and Mary decide to have a baby because they both lost one. I've been researching for my personal collection of short stories, and I found that tying an ending to a story so quickly with a simple solution is not always the best way, or the most exciting. I've been trying to improve my writing with jaw-dropping endings, or scenes, and I thought I sort of lacked in this ending. BUT, this is just a fanfic and of course the readers want to see a happy ending. :)