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Reviews For First Kiss
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Reviewer: Rolinda Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 14 Jan 2007 1:28 pm Title: Chapter 1

It is unclear why Mary feels this First Kiss is also the Last Kiss of their relationship. Interesting idea for a story. Fairly well developed. Needs follow through. Well worth reading however.

Author's Response:

I decided to change the end! Because you're right--it's not clear why this is their last kiss--and you know what? I don't want it to be! Thank you for reading!

Reviewer: Tarlan Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 May 2006 12:33 am Title: Chapter 1

Hope Mary's wrong and that won't be the 'last' kiss :-)

Author's Response:

It wasn't their last kiss....I did a few changes. =)

Reviewer: Terry Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 10 Apr 2006 8:59 pm Title: Chapter 1

Very good. Short and simple.

Reviewer: Dreamer Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Apr 2006 7:00 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow. i enjoyed that. Your writing is getting better all the time. keep up the good work!

Author's Response:

thank you for that, dreamer!

Reviewer: gigi Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 09 Apr 2006 9:05 am Title: Chapter 1

Hmmm - interesting - I like the kiss, but it's the last kiss? Are you sure?

Author's Response: For this short story anyway. Don't worry. More will come!

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